Anthar Posted February 21, 2010 Report Share Posted February 21, 2010 BRINDO EN TU BOCA Brindo en tu boca por los tantos que quisieron besarla, brindo con un beso del alma por aquellos que hundidos en el alcohol quisieron olvidarla. Brindo también por el poema que escribió tu lengua en mis labios, brindo en tu boca por el placer de sentirme enamorado. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
petshopguy Posted February 21, 2010 Report Share Posted February 21, 2010 (edited) ay! ke título tan audaz Edited February 21, 2010 by petshopguy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azazell Posted February 21, 2010 Report Share Posted February 21, 2010 xD inetresante tu texto, tiene lo suyo.. saludos Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lele_Manhattan Posted February 24, 2010 Report Share Posted February 24, 2010 Lo encuentro sencillo y muy bonito :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Uoho Posted February 24, 2010 Report Share Posted February 24, 2010 Fome, muy repetido el enfoque, deberías buscar algo más metaforico, eso le pondría más intesidad a tu poema. Paz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anthar Posted February 25, 2010 Author Report Share Posted February 25, 2010 gracias por las criticas Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Uoho Posted February 25, 2010 Report Share Posted February 25, 2010 gracias por las criticas De nada hombre, si quieres, te doy el dato de algunos poetas callejeros de españa super buenos, envia MP si quieres :) Paz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
babii_blue Posted March 6, 2010 Report Share Posted March 6, 2010 es sencillo bonito Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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